Revision is where your writing is taken to the next step.

Your teacher has given you feedback on one or more items to revise in your writing.

Return to the draft of your story to revise based on those comments and any other revisions you might want to make. This is an important part of the writing process and you will be marked on whether or not you were able to make the necessary revisions. 

To complete this assignment, click HERE to download the template.

Part A: Provide 3 examples of where you have revised your story.  Include both the original and revised sections.

Example:

Original:  As he approached the door he got more and more frightened.

Revised:  As he approached the door his hands started to shake and his mouth went dry.  (show don't tell)

Some things to keep in mind when revising:

strong opening show don't tell good title adding details removing unneccesary or repetitive words strong, specific words similes and metaphors word pictures believable dialogue

Part B: Incorporating Figurative Language

Earlier in this unit we discussed the literary element figurative language. It is time to incorporate the tool into your writing. Find places within your story where you can incorporate an example of each of the 5 types of figurative language.

Once you have completed the exercise upload your document to the Short Story Revising Dropbox.