Revision is where your writing is taken to the next step.

Your teacher has given you feedback on one or more items to revise in your writing.

Return to the draft of your essay to revise based on those comments and any other revisions you might want to make. This is an important part of the writing process and you will be marked on whether or not you were able to make the necessary revisions. 

To complete this assignment, Click HERE to download the template.

Part A: Provide 3 examples of the revisions you made to your essay.  Include both the original and revised sections.

Example:

Original: "Arctic drilling may not be perfect, but it will probably help us stop using foreign oil at some point. This, I imagine, will be a good thing."

Revised:Time and time again, science has shown that arctic drilling is dangerous. It is not worth the risks environmentally or economically."

Part B: Incorporating Transitional Words or Phrases

Earlier in this unit we discussed the importance of transitional words or phrases.

Once you have completed the exercise upload your document to the Persuasive Essay Revising Dropbox.